The Magic Carpet

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7 Responses to The Magic Carpet

  1. jayot says:

    You could say ‘the girl’ instead of Rosie, from T’ea.

  2. mahms says:

    I like your story it is very descriptive and imaginative.

    From Sara

  3. Secret Book Club Member says:

    This is a great, imaginative tale reminding me a bit of Charlie and The Chocolate Factory/Glass Elevator. You described the setting wonderfully and I had in my head “Tim Burton” style landscapes mixed with The Wizard of Oz. Next time think carefully about the end of your tale so the final part of your story is as engaging as your setting descriptions.

  4. alfan says:

    Amazing story Liyana, it has a lot of interesting vocabulary and you covered all the features that a book needs to make more people want to read your story. Keep up the effort. : )

  5. zamas says:

    good work liyana but instead of saying etc you could of said something diffrent

  6. ahmei says:

    Fabulous description of how she entered, and reluctantly left. Amazing work Liyana! I wouldn’t be surprised if you won
    ! Well done Liyana

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