This is a great, imaginative tale reminding me a bit of Charlie and The Chocolate Factory/Glass Elevator. You described the setting wonderfully and I had in my head “Tim Burton” style landscapes mixed with The Wizard of Oz. Next time think carefully about the end of your tale so the final part of your story is as engaging as your setting descriptions.
Amazing story Liyana, it has a lot of interesting vocabulary and you covered all the features that a book needs to make more people want to read your story. Keep up the effort. : )
You could say ‘the girl’ instead of Rosie, from T’ea.
I like your story it is very descriptive and imaginative.
From Sara
This is a great, imaginative tale reminding me a bit of Charlie and The Chocolate Factory/Glass Elevator. You described the setting wonderfully and I had in my head “Tim Burton” style landscapes mixed with The Wizard of Oz. Next time think carefully about the end of your tale so the final part of your story is as engaging as your setting descriptions.
Thank you for your comment. You have made me enjoy writing story.
Amazing story Liyana, it has a lot of interesting vocabulary and you covered all the features that a book needs to make more people want to read your story. Keep up the effort. : )
good work liyana but instead of saying etc you could of said something diffrent
Fabulous description of how she entered, and reluctantly left. Amazing work Liyana! I wouldn’t be surprised if you won
! Well done Liyana