ZAIN STORY

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8 Responses to ZAIN STORY

  1. mutts says:

    Zain, your work is outstanding; you put a lot adjectives and the best part was the as it shivered but instead of using “and” so much you could of used semi collons. by syed

  2. asghu says:

    I liked when you used a little bit of adjectives and punctuation and that it was creative.

  3. chows says:

    Zain that was really good just add more adjectives other than that it is brilliant

  4. Secret Book Club Member says:

    A good story Zain, well done. I like the drama and building up of suspense to the point where the boy is in a room with a huge creature sleeping on the floor. What was that creature? why was it there?

  5. khokz says:

    I loved your title and how you used adjectives to make your work better.

  6. miahl says:

    Very good ! Its cool how you make it spooky and describe it. very interesting.

  7. bhamu says:

    very good Zain but there were places to put as it shivered they but that writing was expressed good

  8. Khalid says:

    Wow – really impressed with your work. Sounds very frightening and I am keen to know what happens next…. Keep it up.

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