Zain, your work is outstanding; you put a lot adjectives and the best part was the as it shivered but instead of using “and” so much you could of used semi collons. by syed
A good story Zain, well done. I like the drama and building up of suspense to the point where the boy is in a room with a huge creature sleeping on the floor. What was that creature? why was it there?
Zain, your work is outstanding; you put a lot adjectives and the best part was the as it shivered but instead of using “and” so much you could of used semi collons. by syed
I liked when you used a little bit of adjectives and punctuation and that it was creative.
Zain that was really good just add more adjectives other than that it is brilliant
A good story Zain, well done. I like the drama and building up of suspense to the point where the boy is in a room with a huge creature sleeping on the floor. What was that creature? why was it there?
I loved your title and how you used adjectives to make your work better.
Very good ! Its cool how you make it spooky and describe it. very interesting.
very good Zain but there were places to put as it shivered they but that writing was expressed good
Wow – really impressed with your work. Sounds very frightening and I am keen to know what happens next…. Keep it up.