Hi Khalisah,
I love the way you have introduced the prince to your reader and just by telling us his reaction made us aware that he is a good guy; this is the sign of a talented writer! You also used descriptive language and simile well.
Next time think about using semi-colons instead of all the commas.
Well done.
Mrs M
Hi Khalisah,
I love the way you have introduced the prince to your reader and just by telling us his reaction made us aware that he is a good guy; this is the sign of a talented writer! You also used descriptive language and simile well.
Next time think about using semi-colons instead of all the commas.
Well done.
Mrs M