Hi Gia,
You have used the narrator’s voice really well again to create empathy in your reader. I love how you told me the back story of the picture and began to describe the chaos and your frustration.
Next time remember to check your grammar as I can spot a few errors.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
Hi Gia,
You have used the narrator’s voice really well again to create empathy in your reader. I love how you told me the back story of the picture and began to describe the chaos and your frustration.
Next time remember to check your grammar as I can spot a few errors.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
thank you mrs moore that is really great feedback I will keep that in my mind