lost gravity by amelie

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9 Responses to lost gravity by amelie

  1. dhang says:

    wow Amelie I love how you added in the suspense at the end
    to improve if you wanted to you can check your spellings
    🙂

  2. eremi says:

    you story was so interesting I really like your description
    by iva

  3. eremi says:

    you story was so interesting I really like your description
    by iva
    wonderful work am

  4. eremi says:

    you story was so interesting I really like your description
    by iva
    wonderful work Amelie BFFTYD

  5. eremi says:

    you story was so interesting I really like your description
    by iva
    wonderful work Amelie BFFTWD
    maby you could could PUT ABIT MORE DESCRIPTION TO PICTURE THE PICTURE MORE!

  6. eremi says:

    you story was so interesting I really like your description
    by iva
    wonderful work Amelie BFFTWD
    maby you could could PUT ABIT MORE DESCRIPTION TO PICTURE THE PICTURE MORE!

    BY IVA 5B

  7. eremi says:

    you story was so interesting I really like your description
    by iva
    wonderful work Amelie BFFTWD
    maby you could could PUT ABIT MORE DESCRIPTION TO PICTURE THE PICTURE MORE!

    BY IVA 5B

    PUT SOME SIMELIES IN YOUR WORK IVA MRS MOORE

  8. shaiz says:

    great story
    try to check your spellings

  9. nanand says:

    Hi Amelie,
    I like the way you told me the back story of the picture and used punctuation to add emphasis. You jump between i and they – stick to one next time.
    An enjoyable read, well done.
    Mrs M

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