Hi Rakeen
This was a great read; I love the way you used such precise detail to describe all the chaos that would occur if gravity suddenly disappeared. Next time use a signalling phrase, such as ‘meanwhile somewhere not far away ‘ , to signpost to your reader the you are switching focus, as it will make such clever twists easier to follow.
Well done.
Mrs M
Hi Rakeen
This was a great read; I love the way you used such precise detail to describe all the chaos that would occur if gravity suddenly disappeared. Next time use a signalling phrase, such as ‘meanwhile somewhere not far away ‘ , to signpost to your reader the you are switching focus, as it will make such clever twists easier to follow.
Well done.
Mrs M