Hi Sampriti,
There are some lovely descriptive elements to your tale of the picture and I like the way you told me the back story of how things happened. You used the narrator’s voice and questions well to draw me in. Make sure you edit before you publish as I can see some missing punctuation. Precise detail with your description will also help me to get a clearer picture in my mind.
Mrs M
Hi Sampriti,
There are some lovely descriptive elements to your tale of the picture and I like the way you told me the back story of how things happened. You used the narrator’s voice and questions well to draw me in. Make sure you edit before you publish as I can see some missing punctuation. Precise detail with your description will also help me to get a clearer picture in my mind.
Mrs M