Hi Olimaron
I like the way you used humour to describe all the chaos of what was happening and you responded well to the feedback you were given about linking your ideas and avoiding repetition. Keep doing that and remember to check your punctuation before you publish.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
Hi Olimaron
I like the way you used humour to describe all the chaos of what was happening and you responded well to the feedback you were given about linking your ideas and avoiding repetition. Keep doing that and remember to check your punctuation before you publish.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
Thank you for giving me a comment MRS Nanand.
A funny and imaginative piece of writing, after reading the text I want to know what happens next!
Thank you Dougie Mcfarlane for the comment.
Hi Olimaron ,
This is a great piece of work but I wanted to know more , you have used humour well. 🙂
From Arjan