HI Mia, This was an enjoyable read, you used the narrator’s voice well to draw me in and described the change in feelings well. Next time think about your use of punctuation and how you can use it to control your reader and add emphasis. Mrs M
I will.
Hi Mia, You have made this a brilliant story I like the way you said this was fun but I was still worried . KEEP IT UP 🙂
From Arjan
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HI Mia,
This was an enjoyable read, you used the narrator’s voice well to draw me in and described the change in feelings well. Next time think about your use of punctuation and how you can use it to control your reader and add emphasis.
Mrs M
I will.
Hi Mia,
You have made this a brilliant story I like the way you said this was fun but I was still worried . KEEP IT UP 🙂
From Arjan