the ship

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2 Responses to the ship

  1. nanand says:

    Hi Rehana
    Some beautiful descriptive language here to create a mood.

    How could you use sentence starters to indicate how the story will move on?

    Keep it up.
    Mrs M

  2. Losheni.M says:

    Hi Rehana
    This text is really attention seeking as a wide range of vocabulary has been used however there are some grammatical errors…a comma is not needed in the line, ‘a bird, suddenly flew’.
    Well done.
    Losheni

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